Chapter 1- A new beginning

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Nov 3, 2008 2:41 PM

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Jul 2008

Queen Kairi from the planet Seiya lived with her two girls and her nephew, one day she gave birth to another daughter named Tukiko(moon) but when her daughter was born an old man came and said to the queen that her daughter is the secret child and then the old man disappeared never to be found. The secret child is a child that has the most powerful power in the entire universe. 4 years later Tukiko disappeared so the queen send some of her guard to search for her but at the same time the Acnicon aliens from another planet came and attacked the planet Seiya. When the queen found her she re borne her and erased her memory and sent her to earth so she can live a normal life the queen tried to do the same thing to the other but she could only send them to earth cause she didn’t have no more power left to protect them.

Now Tukiko is an 11 year old living a normal life with a family her brother, her sister, and her mother. One day when Kairi is looking at the story sky on the roof top of her house the wind blew by her necklace and it flew on a three. She got her necklace but she fell of her four story house. When still in the air white feathers made a circle around her and two white wings pop out her back. Her wings started having a mind of her own, the wings started flying higher and higher then it suddenly stopped and her wings disappeared. She fell but by reflex she grabbed the edge of the roof. Her older brother Kenchie, came rushing out saying “What are you doing.” He grabbed and pulled her. She tried to explain but Kenchie didn’t believe her. The next day Tukiko thought that it was all a dream so she went on with her day. She went to her karate class were her brother teaches, after her karate class she went to her sister sword men class, which is in the same building. After her classes Tukiko went to the forest lake and met a boy. When he saw her he didn’t say a word. When Tukiko said hi and he said hi back.
“What’s you’re name I’m Tukiko Acima,” she said.
“Oh! Uhm... I’m Kiyo Akaru,” he said, Tukiko was so curious about Kiyo because he looked so familiar to her but she never saw him before, She new almost every one in town except him.
“Are u new in town? Cause I never saw you in town,” she asked.
”No, I’m born here” he responded.
”And what about school? I never saw you there, which school do you go to,” she asked. “Same as you, I just go with a help teacher… Well I need to go, bye.” A couple of hours after Kiyo was gone, at sunset, Tukiko put her feet’s in the water. A creature that looked like it was only made of water grabbed her leg and pulled her inside the water, she tried and tried to get out but she couldn’t she was about to lose her breath but when she moved her arms, her arms sliced the creature’s arm in two pieces. Tukiko swam up to shore but the creature continued attacking her, Tukiko realized that she has water powers she tried and tried to stop the monster but it was just adsorbing her attacks, so she thought if he could adsorb her water power’s she could too, always when she tried two the monster kept on attacking. So she remembered that she can fly she looked for a tree high enough for her to fall off. When she finished climbing and was at the top of the tree she jumped off but her wings didn’t appear, right when she was about to hit the ground white feathers made circle around her and two white wings pop out of her back. She started flying when Tukiko was high enough a bit of the water started raising and formed in her hand she then threw the water ball at the creature. A couple of minutes later the monster disappeared in thin air. A random girl appeared out of bushes and said, “You beat my monster but I’ll come back for you.” Without time to reply the girl disappeared. When Tukiko realized what time it was she ran as fast as she could back home.

When Tukiko arrived home her brother Kenchi told her that her friend Amora called for her. Just when she was about to call Amora, the phone ranged and it was her, ‘Hello, oh! Hey Amora so what did…”
Amora interrupted Tukiko from talking and told her to go some were private. Tukiko went up in her room “Hey Tukiko I have something really impotent to tell you… I have magical power’s” she said, Tukiko was so shocked that Amora had power’s two so she told her everything to her and every thing was ok.

At night a meteor went crashing at the far end of the town, were lived only a famer and his family, the meteor killed every living thing that was on the farm. Inside the meteor were unknown creatures.